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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise teh information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise teh information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the amount of visitors who
was
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were
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 visiting to Ashdown Museum during the
year
 before and the
year
 after, it was refurbished. The charts demonstrate the
result
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results
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 of surveys asking
from
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apply
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the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Overall
, during the
year
 after refurbishment was more than the
year
 before refurbishment. The charts were divided into 6 sections which were very
satisfied
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 and no response. Dissatisfied after a
year
refurbishment
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of refurbishment
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, it was replaced by
satisfied
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a satisfied
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 proportion. The
no response
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 result had stable figures which
was
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were
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 5.
By contrast
, very satisfied increased
into
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to
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 35 which
were
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was
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 15 a
year
 ago. The
most
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highest factor declined
with
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to
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 25 from 40 and
then
, the second following section "satisfied" had a growth between 30 and 40, as expected.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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