The graph gives information from a 2008 report about consumtion of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The line graph illustrates the amount of energy consumption in the USA since 1980 with
projections
until 2030. Units are measured in quadrillions.
Overall
, it is clear that
the consumption of six kinds of energy increased generally over the period, but sources most significantly petrol, oil and coal or (fuel).
Firstly
, the number of petrol and oil were
35 Change the verb form
was
quadrillion
in 1980, Change to a plural noun
quadrillions
meanwhile
the quantity of coal and natural gas Add a comma
meanwhile,
were
in terms of nearly 16 and 20 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
quadrillion
. Change to a plural noun
quadrillions
While
the amount of nuclear, solar and hydropower were just above 4 quadrillion
, respectively.
The figur
Correct your spelling
figure
of
petrol and oil decreased Change preposition
for
slighly
around 31 until 1985 and it fluctuated just under 34 Correct your spelling
slightly
quadrillion
till 1995. Change to a plural noun
quadrillions
Then
there was a dramatic increase to just under 50 quadrillion
since 1995 with projections
until 2030. In 1985, natural gas and coal observed a minimal decrease and increase of approximately 16 and just below 17, respectively. After which
, the quantity of oscillation Correct pronoun usage
this
substantially
between 17 and 23 from 1990 to 2015.
Following that, Add a missing verb
was substantially
the
coal rose significantly to nearly 30 Correct article usage
apply
quadrillion
since 2015 with projections
until 2030, while
natural gas stayed constant.
With regard as
nuclear, solar,wind and hydropower went up slightly to just over 5 Change preposition
to
quandrillion
between 1980 and 1990. After that, the nuclear climbed gradually to roughly 7 Correct your spelling
quadrillion
quandrillion
from 1990 to 2030. Correct your spelling
quadrillion
Then
the solar and hydropower oscillated between 5 and 3 from 1990 to 2010. Following that, they were
stood steady by nearly 4 Unnecessary verb
apply
quadrillion
since 2010 with projections
until 2030.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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