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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020
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This
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 figure compares the making and using
tonnes
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 of
rice
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 in ten different countries in 2020.
Overall
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, both Hungary and the Philippines are in the high values,
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 South Korea have the least amount of
rice
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 in production and consumption within
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 countries. It is obvious that Hungary
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 the highest rate
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 producing and consuming
rice
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 with 540
tonnes
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 and 532
tonnes
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 respectively. The Philippines is in the highest-second level with 410
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 and 387
tonnes
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 of making and using
rice
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 respectively.
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, South Korea has the
least
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 proportion of production and consumption with 49
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 and 45
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 respectively. There are some countries in
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the bar
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 chart that have the same value in producing or consuming. Both Vietnam and Zambia have 46
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 of
consuming
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 in
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 report. Meanwhile, Zambia and Bangladesh are similar in 53
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 of
rice
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 production.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, rice with synonyms.
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