You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart compares the
number
of foreign students
who travelled from four different countries to Australia from 1982 to June 20th in
2000. Change preposition
apply
Overall
, it is evident that the number
of students
had an upward trends
and Indonesia had the highest Correct the article-noun agreement
an upward trend
upward trends
number
of immigrants among the others.
At the outset of period
, Malaysian Add an article
the period
students
occupied the largest number
of students
in Australia, which begin
with under ten Wrong verb form
began
thousands
and reached Change to singular
thousand
to
approximately nine Change preposition
apply
thousands
in 1983. Change to singular
thousand
In contrast
, the other three nations sent less than 5000 students
.
In 1987, Hong Kong had a dramatic increase and reached the
peak (9000) in 1992, Correct article usage
a
while
Malaysia remained steady. During the era, Singapore and Indonesia experienced a
steady growth. In 1994, three countries except Singapore had Remove the article
apply
same
Change the article
a same
the same
number
of students
in Australia.
After 1994, Indonesia skyrocketed in the number
of educational tourists and reached to
25000 but saw a decline Change preposition
apply
at the end
of the era. Malaysia and Hong Kong reached to
nearly 18000 after some fluctuation. Singapore had a steady growth and Change preposition
apply
finally
stood on
20000.Change preposition
at
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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