The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and pie charts illustrate the revenues and expenditures of
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Great Britain’s police force in
two
years period. The table provides data on their incomes, and the
two
pie charts show the sectors
which
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the money
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on
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.
Overall
, it is evident that the highest amount of their budget was allocated by
government
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, and around
one-forth
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one-fourth
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of it
spent
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was spent
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on staff’s wages.
According to
the table, the police annual budget saw a small rise in 2018
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to 2017, the total income was 318.6 m and 304.7m, respectively. The money which was injected by
national
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government in the
two
years was approximately 178 million.
However
, the tax
was
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paid by local people was 91.2 million in 2017 and after a slight growth reached
to
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102.3 in 2018. The other revenue source
such
as grants and
donation
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gained around 38 million. Turning to the pie charts, the highest proportion of the police budget
spent
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on officers and staff salaries, in 2017
it
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was around seventy
percent
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,
whereas
, the money
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spend
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on technology was eight
percent
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. In 2018, around 14% was allocated
on
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technology,
whereas
, the employees’ salaries experienced a little decline, around 69%. The building and transport expenses
was
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about 17% during the
two
years.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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