Students should pay full cost for their own study, because university education benefits inviduals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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that
full
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the full
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cost of
student's
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a student's
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study
are
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should
pay
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be paid
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by
students
because
university
education benefits
inviduals
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individuals
rather than society.
This
writter
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writer
completely
agree
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agrees
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with
this
statement because
these thing
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this thing
these things
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can help
student
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students
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independent and have a lot of experience with
development
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the development
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of social
skill
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skills
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. The first reason
students
should
to
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apply
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pay for their own is it can help them
independent
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be independent
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.
Students
usually depend on their parents and
not
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do not
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try hard to
study
. If
students
pay
full
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the full
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cost for
thei
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their
the
own
study
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studies
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by
find
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jobs they will
study
more hard
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harder
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because they do not want to waste their
money
.
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example
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example,
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may
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many
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parents let
thir
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their
children pay for their own
study
because when they
study
in
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at
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university
, they are old enough to earn
money
by themself so they afford to pay
for
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apply
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their bill.
By
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this
way, they will
study
to deserve
with
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apply
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their
money
and take responsibility for their life if they earn
money
early. All these things are
inviduals
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individuals
individual
benefits. Another reason is when they earn
money
early to pay
for
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apply
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theur
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their
the
bill
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bills
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, they will get lots of experience and
moreover
is
impve
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improve
simple
social
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their social
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skill
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skills
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before
graduate
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graduating
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from
university
.
For instance
, in the work environment, they need to
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be discipline
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discipline
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and hard working. All of that
are
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very helpful to
students
before graduate. In VietNam , many people are very good at
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so they started to teach children who are very bad at simple
english
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English
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, they are
tutor
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tutors
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at home,
teaching
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and teaching
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help
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helps
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them earn enough to pay
university
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their university
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bill
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bills
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,
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apply
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because
salary
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the salary
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of
tutor
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a tutor
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in VietNam very high. In general, paying
full
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the full
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cost for their
student's
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students'
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study
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studies
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by
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on
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their own is
the
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a
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good thing because benefits
for
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apply
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inviduals
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individuals
much more than
for
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apply
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society. It can help
students
live independently
also
develope
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develop
developed
their social
skill
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skills
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before
graduate
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graduating
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from
university
. But
students
should not work too much because they will not have enough time for their
study
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studies
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.

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