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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
people
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 support spending
money
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 on the motorways and street tracks. I disagree
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this
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with this
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 problem because it is an unusual condition for me. I prefer local
roads
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will
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to run
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 smoothly.
This
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 state is good why spending
money
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 on public
roads
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 because it will be the economy
why
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that
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protect
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protects
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 from gas the nature. If much gas goes out, the environment plants and
people
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 will see damage from it. So, gas is a very
poisonly
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poisonous
 substance.
Although
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 a lot of public
roads
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 are very difficult for drivers, why they are fixed by the government
.
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?
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 It will be
repairing
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repaired
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 in spite of public
roads
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 fixed by the government the
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particular
particulary
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particular
 reason for circumstance cast is very much at the present time.
Money
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 must be collected for the exact purpose of
roads
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 to fix. If the public
roads
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do
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are
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 not
fix
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fixed
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,
this
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 will cause a big scandal with native
people
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. Today, all the motorways of the state are fixed by themselves. It would not be a problem
cause
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for
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people
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,
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apply
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 if they
are
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were
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 suffering from it.
For example
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, I prefer
the
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apply
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fixed
roads
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 why I want to
quite
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quit
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drive
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driving
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. The
roads
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 may be repair requirements, and your car often breaks down. Now, traffic jams often happen. Why are
roads
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 very thin and small
.
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?
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 I think all cities are suffering
it
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from it
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 because
people
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see
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have seen
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more
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it more
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 than two years ago. In conclusion, all
people
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mast
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must
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 walk clearly and
smoth
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smooth
roads
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. The government must spend a lot of
money
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 because
people
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 are working
their
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in their
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 city. If they do not fix the road, they are going to leave
this
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 country
why
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and
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 local
roads
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are
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will be
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 unfixed.
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Position Clarity
You clearly stated your disagreement with the prompt, establishing a clear position.
Broad Perspective
Attempted to discuss environmental considerations, showing an attempt to approach the topic from a broader perspective.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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