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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas in words, pictures, music, or film, in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option?

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In recent times,
creativity
 has drastically decreased
due to
 the surge of AI,
specially
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 the utilization of AI in creative generation. I completely agree with the statement, my preference and answer for the question will be discussed
further
.
Creativity
 is the essence of innovation which is
parmount
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paramount
 for the advancement of humans. Once a wise man said; "not everything can be expressed in words" which is accurate, if we look at the
form
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 of
arts
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 which were created over the years, they are not only a tourist attraction but
also
 a way of conveying the legacy behind the art
along with
 the story of the artist.
Furthermore
, artists should be given the freedom to express their ideas in their own unique way to preserve
the
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history,
insipire
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inspire
 the youth, and most importantly
to
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demonstrate their ideology.
Instead
 of putting the restrictions, the government
sould
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should
could
 be encouraging the sources of
creativity
 as long as they are not controversial or bringing any harm. In my opinion, the intervention of AI
for
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creative
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 generation of art pieces, may it be films, pictures or movies, should be
structurized
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structured
 as an
extenstion
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extension
 rather than being a primary source of creation as the whole purpose behind
an
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art is conveying a message to the masses.
To conclude
,
creativity
 should be prioritised by
the
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individuals without the
inteference
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interference
 of AI in the
idea generation
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 process.
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, there should be some restrictions set in place by the government on the freedom to express to ensure a non-controversial environment.
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task response
Ensure your essay directly addresses the question. While discussing the impact of AI on creativity is relevant, make sure your main argument on freedom for creative artists is always front and center.
coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of connectors to enhance coherence. While your essay flows well, deploying a wider range of linking words can improve readability and cohesion.
task response
Expand on your examples to support your arguments. When you mention aspects like the role of art in preserving history or inspiring youth, providing specific examples will strengthen your argument.
introduction/conclusion
You effectively introduced and concluded your essay, providing a clear stance on the topic.
logical structure
Your essay demonstrates a good structure, with paragraphs clearly organized around central ideas.
supported main points
You've made a noteworthy effort to argue the importance of creative freedom and the role of government and AI in the creative process.

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