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The charts below show the level of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the level of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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There are three tables which
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 been done for our investigation, where
first
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 diagram illustrates the data about
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 percentage of school attendance in developing and industrialised
countries
 during 10 years launching from 1980,
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 one provides
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 proportion of scientists and technicians per 1000 people and third shows an information about research and development sectors improvement
according to
 above-mentioned categories.
Firstly
, as it can be observed in accordance with all three diagrams, the percentage of public involvement in
such
 sectors as education and research improvement is considerably higher in industrialised
countries
, more than a few times.
For instance
, there was approximately threefold more attendance in
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industrialised
industrialized
countries
 in comparison with developing
countries
, which was equal
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 2
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 of education attendance in 1980.
Furthermore
, it is essential to note that citizens of developing
countries
 did not accelerate the research direction over 10 years
accordingly
.
Overall
, there was an enormous climb in the development of scientific activities in industrialised
countries
 during 10 years, around twofold more than in 1980.
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