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You are planning to travel and would like someone to take care of your apartment while you are away. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •explain why you will be away •ask your friend to take care of your apartment •describe the tasks you want your friend to do Begin your letter as follows: Dear……

#travel #someone #care #apartment #friend #•explain #•ask #•describe #tasks #dear……
Dear
Emillia
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Emilia
, I hope
thisletter
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this letter
 finds you in great health and you are doing well there, I am writing
this
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have
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 planning to go on vacation on Monday next week until Saturday night.
Along with
this
letter
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 I am going to ask you to take care of my apartment. First of all, I will go on vacation on Monday morning to Japan and
i
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 will come back
in
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on
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 Saturday night I need your hand to assist me
to take
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in taking
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 care
my
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 flat during my holiday.
Moreover
, there are a lot of my
pricely
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princely
 goods, I trust to you that you can maintain it well.
Furthermore
, let me explain what you must
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do there.
Firstly
, In the afternoon please turn on the lamp
in addition
 I would say thank you if sometime you
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 to put
up
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it up
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overthere
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over there
.
Finally
, I have
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an equatic
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equatic
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aquatic
 animal
that is
 Arwana please give him food every night. I expect you will be able to make it and take care of
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. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Vievie.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly addresses a specific point for improved clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Correct minor grammatical errors and adjust sentence structures for better flow.
Task Achievement
Elaborate a bit more on why you trust your friend with your apartment for a more complete response.
Task Achievement
Your letter effectively communicates your request and provides clear instructions on what needs to be done.
Task Achievement
Friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical progression from introduction to request, then instructions, and finally a closing statement.
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