Money offered for post graduate research is limited; as a consequence, some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful sub. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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funds for postgraduate
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are
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.
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, other
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people
argue that
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government
should
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financial aid to only
science
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rather than
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less important
subjects
. In my opinion, I think that, as per current situations,
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ought to
be raise
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more funds
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science
research
,
while
other useless topic
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. Nowadays,
due to
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global warming, human error,
unwanted
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and unwanted
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harmful diseases are
occuring
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occurring
, for tackling them
science
is the foremost option to handle the situation.
In other words
, in the
last
few
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human civilisation and animal life have suffered through various massacre events, and we never know where the next conflict will erupt.
For example
, covid -19 event, in that period, many people
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lost their
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,
job
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and economical
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economical
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support.
Therefore
, to overcome
such
type of destructive conditions,
scientist
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scientists
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have to
prepared
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for
that
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them
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with multiple cures and
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a thesis
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to eliminate them.
Furthermore
, Technological advancement has grown utterly, and new
equiepments
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equipment
can improve the
research
accurecy
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accuracy
level,
proccesing
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processing
time,
efforts
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and efforts
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.
In addition
, many recent
gradutates
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graduates
MIT and machine learning students trying to
envent
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invent
some
importat inovation
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important innovation
to help
science
and environment issues, but
due to
the scarcity of
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they could not
completed
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their
reasearch
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research
. so
government
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the government
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can help them through
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shcollership programm
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scholarship program
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right
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platform to experiment and direct financial
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support
supoort
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support
to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
perfect results.
on the contrary
, unnecessary
subjects
field
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such
as some specific art,
entertenment
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entertainment
and various fashion
exibitions
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exhibitions
.
authorites
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authorities
can less focus on these types of
subjects
because they are
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imperative for
human
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future.
For instance
,
amusment
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amusement
subjects
, art concerts and fashion are not
contrubuting
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contributing
as
such
valuable inputs in future betterment of world aspect.
thus
, the
govenment
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government
can
provieds
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provide
provides
more money
to
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science
innovation rather than unnecessary
subjects
. In conclusion, The
government
should have
support
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scientist and their
innovetive
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innovative
research
devolopment
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development
through financial aid rather than useless
subjects
because they could not
contrubute
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contribute
as much
impotance
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importance
for
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future
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betterment of the world.
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