Some people argue that companies and private individual rather than government should pay the bills of pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
think that bills
of
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for
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pollution
ought to
pay
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be paid by
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companies and every
individuals
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individual
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, not the
government
. In my opinion,
i
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consider that the authorities are more
responisble
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responsible
of
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for
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rising
pollution
level
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levels
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rather than
common
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the common
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citizan
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citizen
citizens
and
enterprise
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enterprises
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.
However
,the
government
needs to pay all
pollution
bills regardless of limited law
ristriction
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restriction
restrictions
on companies and
individual
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individuals
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. Nowadays, the
government
should enact some rules and laws on
people
to stop unethical
activitis
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activities
, that can harm the
enviornment
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environment
. Many companies are
emmiting
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emitting
the
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harmful
gasess
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gases
gasses
in
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into
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the air
Such
as CO2, nitrogen oxide,
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and methen
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methen
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methane
me then
, which is why the global warming pace is increasing than before.
moreover
, Most
of
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the
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apply
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people
not
using
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use
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litter
box
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boxes
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for
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to
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waste
foods
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food
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, plastics and
liquied enywhere
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liquified everywhere
on the road,
the
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so the
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government
should impose some
fine
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fines
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on
such
activities to prevent the
damge
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damage
of
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the atomsphre
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atomsphre
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atmosphere
.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, the organisation needs to encourage
people
to use public
trasnport
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transport
rather than private vehicles.
For example
, many
people
now use their private cars and bikes to commute to
office
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the office
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, home,
work
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and work
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.
this
is because cars
exaust
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exhaust
the harmful emission
in
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into
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the air.
As a result
, the
tempreture
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temperature
of the environment is growing,
due to
the reason many
people
are facing
the
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skin cancer,
sun stroke
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sunstroke
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,
breathing
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and breathing
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problems.
on the contrary
,
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formost
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foremost
for most
think
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thing
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is, it is
a
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the
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primmary
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primary
duty of every single person to
undertand
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understand
the situation of global warming, and recently happened events because of
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the envirenment
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envirenment
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environment
environmental
hapazard
condistion
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condition
conditions
. every person should have to take some
measuers
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measures
to save the
enviroment
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environment
for sake of the future betterment. If
government
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the government
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can control the
people
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people's
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actions by implementing some rules and fines, it will create a certain influence on the
people
and on other nations too.
For instance
, Many
develope contries
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developed countries
now focusing on electric vehicles, which is
a
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exellent
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excellent
move towards
the
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environment
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environmental
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safety.
thus
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,
electronic
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the electronic
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vehicle
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vehicles
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will not only
ristrict
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restrict
the emission of detrimental gasses
,
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apply
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but
also
can stop the oil
minnigs
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mining
innings
minings
, which is ultimately prevent
the
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apply
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land erosion effectively. In conclusion, the
government
has to pay all bills
of
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for
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pollution
instead
of
indivisuls
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individuals
and firms because of imposing limited rules and laws against those
people
, who
breaks
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break
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the law.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, it is
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the primmary
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primmary
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primary
duty of all
people
to take care of
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the envirenment
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envirenment
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environment
and community for future betterment.
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