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Some people argue that companies and private individual rather than government should pay the bills of pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #companies #government #bills #pollution
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Some
people
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 think that bills
of
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for
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pollution
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 ought to
pay
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be paid by
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 companies and every
individuals
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individual
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, not the
government
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. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 consider that the authorities are more
responisble
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responsible
of
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for
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 rising
pollution
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level
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levels
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 rather than
common
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the common
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citizan
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citizen
citizens
 and
enterprise
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enterprises
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.
However
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,the
government
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 needs to pay all
pollution
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 bills regardless of limited law
ristriction
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restriction
restrictions
 on companies and
individual
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individuals
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. Nowadays, the
government
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 should enact some rules and laws on
people
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 to stop unethical
activitis
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activities
, that can harm the
enviornment
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environment
. Many companies are
emmiting
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emitting
the
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apply
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harmful
gasess
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gases
gasses
in
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into
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 the air
Such
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 as CO2, nitrogen oxide,
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and methen
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methen
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methane
me then
, which is why the global warming pace is increasing than before.
moreover
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, Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 not
using
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use
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 litter
box
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boxes
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for
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to
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 waste
foods
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food
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, plastics and
liquied enywhere
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liquified everywhere
 on the road,
the
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so the
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government
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 should impose some
fine
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fines
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 on
such
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 activities to prevent the
damge
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damage
 of
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the atomsphre
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atomsphre
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atmosphere
.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, the organisation needs to encourage
people
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 to use public
trasnport
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transport
 rather than private vehicles.
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, many
people
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 now use their private cars and bikes to commute to
office
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the office
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, home,
work
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and work
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.
this
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 is because cars
exaust
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exhaust
 the harmful emission
in
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into
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 the air.
As a result
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, the
tempreture
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temperature
 of the environment is growing,
due to
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 the reason many
people
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 are facing
the
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apply
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skin cancer,
sun stroke
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sunstroke
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,
breathing
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and breathing
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 problems.
on the contrary
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,
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the formost
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formost
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foremost
for most
think
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thing
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 is, it is
a
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the
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primmary
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primary
 duty of every single person to
undertand
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understand
 the situation of global warming, and recently happened events because of
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the envirenment
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envirenment
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environment
environmental
 hapazard
condistion
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condition
conditions
. every person should have to take some
measuers
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measures
 to save the
enviroment
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environment
 for sake of the future betterment. If
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government
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the government
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 can control the
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people
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people's
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 actions by implementing some rules and fines, it will create a certain influence on the
people
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 and on other nations too.
For instance
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, Many
develope contries
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developed countries
 now focusing on electric vehicles, which is
a
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an
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exellent
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excellent
 move towards
the
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apply
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environment
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environmental
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 safety.
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thus
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,
electronic
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the electronic
an electronic
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 will not only
ristrict
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restrict
 the emission of detrimental gasses
,
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apply
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 but
also
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 can stop the oil
minnigs
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mining
innings
minings
, which is ultimately prevent
the
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apply
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land erosion effectively. In conclusion, the
government
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 has to pay all bills
of
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for
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pollution
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instead
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 of
indivisuls
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individuals
 and firms because of imposing limited rules and laws against those
people
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, who
breaks
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break
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 the law.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, it is
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the primmary
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primmary
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primary
 duty of all
people
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 to take care of
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the envirenment
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envirenment
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environment
 and community for future betterment.
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Task Response
Try to develop a clear position throughout the response. It seems your opinion wavers, and strengthening your stance could improve clarity and coherence.
Task Response
Include more specific examples and data to support your arguments. This will enhance the relevance and specificity of your examples, making your essay more persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on your essay structure to make it more logical and organized. This includes having a clear introduction, body paragraphs that focus on one main idea each, and a concise conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical flow of ideas between paragraphs using appropriate linking words and phrases. This will improve the cohesion of your essay.
Task Response
You have presented a nuanced view that acknowledges different sides of the argument, which is good for the task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, which helps frame your essay and clarify your position to the reader.
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