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The following two maps compare the current and future development plans for the western road area of a town called Springsby

The following two maps compare the current and future development plans for the western road area of a town called Springsby
The maps illustrate
Springsby
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town
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 as it
now
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is now
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, and is planned to be developed.
In now
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,
Springsby
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town
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have
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 two main roads
call
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called
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Park
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Aveue
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Avenue
 and Western Road. A
park
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include
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 a lake in the northwest
that
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apply
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opposite
Housing
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the Housing
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 Estate.
School
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The school
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 is in the south of
map
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the map
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.A big space in the southeast corner. In future,
Springsby
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town
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 will be redeveloped.
A half
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 of
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park
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the park
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 will be demolished
to
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into
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Car
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a Car
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Park
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. School beside empty space will be built Bus station in the southwest corner. Close to Housing Estate, a shopping Centre will be opening up but
bigger
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a bigger
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shopping
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Shopping
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 Centre will be built
is
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across
western
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the western
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 road in
Springsby
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town
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. Both shopping
Centre
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centres
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beside
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apply
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will
be added
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add
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 a car
park
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, Housing Estate’s side car
park
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 obviously
smallest
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the smallest
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in
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on
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this
Linking Words
 map.School and Housing Estate stay the same and
Springsby
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town
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have
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has
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 two main roads
call
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called
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Park
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Aveue
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Avenue
 and Western Road no any change.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words springsby, town, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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