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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart presents a comparison of the average weekly expenditure by families as a proportion of their weekly income between the years 1968 and 2018, which has been divided into 8 distinctive
categories
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.
Overall
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, three
categories
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 have seen an increase in their spending (housing, leisure, transport),
meanwhile
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 four
categories
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 experienced a notable decrease in their consumption (
food
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, fuel and power, cloth and footwear, and personal
goods
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). Having said
this
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, one
category
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 (household
goods
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) has seen no change in its expenditure pattern.
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, of the three sections that have experienced a reduction, the fuel and power
category
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 has seen the most marginal change, with a reduction from over 5% of weekly income to approximately 4%, unlike
food
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 which has seen the largest drop in its consumption from 35% to roughly 17%.
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,
this
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 means that spending on
food
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 has almost halved in
this
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 half of a century.
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, the percentage of weekly income on personal
goods
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 decreased as well from around 7% to under 5%, albeit
this
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 was not as drastic as the surge in the
food
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category
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.
On the other hand
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, leisure spending increased throughout the period from around 9% to roughly 22%, meaning that it had the biggest gain in its consumption. Despite both transport and housing experiencing a
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noticeable
 increase with roughly 10% and 9% growth respectively,
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 was not as precipitous as the growth in the demand for leisure.
Furthermore
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, contrary to the previously highlighted
categories
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, the quantity spent on household
goods
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 remained constant at around 7% in both years.
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,
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 is an anomaly as it was the only
category
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 to have experienced no change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, food, goods, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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