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Many children these days have their own mobile phones what are the advantage and disadvantage of it.

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As far as almost all the child have their personal phone there are some benefits and drawbacks in using these phones I`m going to explain a few of them. Assabaling to a phone for kids means that they are able to
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 which can be good for them like doing their job by themselves like doing some of their homework related to the internet. The other benefit is having a nice
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 with their teachers or friends
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 is so good for social skills. The latest thing is that
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 they can do a lot of research
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 some websites like
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 example, they may know about some wrong thing are so soon for them and they may make their mind busy. Another thing is they might
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not read their
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 like the time they have an exam and they are turning on their mobile phone like playing some games or videos on YouTube. Absolutely the benefits are more than the advantages. In general
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Aim to cover all parts of the task with equal attention to both advantages and disadvantages to ensure a fully developed response.
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