In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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It was considerably common for
students
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to study in their home state when they pursued
for
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a degree from tertiary
education
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,
whereas
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, these days, they receive more
chance
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chances

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to perform an overseas study, which is able to broaden their horizons.
However
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,
students
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tend to face
with
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more hindrances
while
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living abroad. On the one side, having a third-level
education
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overseas results in several benefits for the
students
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. The experiences gained from
this
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opportunity appear to be significant for
students
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. It is because they are required to exit their comfort zone by immersing themselves
on
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in

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the local culture, which
seem
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to enrich their knowledge.
For instance
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, people who decide to continue their
education
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in Japan are being forced to learn
Japanese
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the Japanese

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language and the culture of Japanese society;
thus
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, they have unlocked a new language ability.
Furthermore
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, studying abroad could be a proper way to expand
students
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connection
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connections

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. Strong connection with other people usually brings benefits in the future, especially when they graduate from the university and start looking for
an
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employment.
Additionally
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, in some cases, the employment rate of
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an individual
the individual

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individual
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individuals

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who graduated from foreign
university
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universities

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tends to be higher than local graduated
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students’
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students

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,
for example
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, some companies in Indonesia prefer to hire
someone’s
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someone

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who
had
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has

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studied abroad.
However
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, the advantages come with some drawbacks, especially to the
students
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themselves.
To begin
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with, most
students
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live with their parents from
the
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elementary until secondary
education
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, and when they decide to study outside of their countries, they need to move out and live by themselves.
This
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condition
appear
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appears

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to be overwhelming for some
students
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because they will surely experience
homesick
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homesickness

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and stress. If
this
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happened, they would not be able to focus on their
education
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and the worst case would be
failed
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failing

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to satisfy the minimum grades to graduate.
For example
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, research claims that mental
condition
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conditions

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play a fundamental role in
students
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life
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lives

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and stress is the number one factor of their failure.
Secondly
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, studying overseas may require a significant amount of money, ranging from tuition
fee
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fees

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to living
cost
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. It appears to be a burden to their family and to the
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themselves. In various
case
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cases

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, many families apply for
loan
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loans

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to fund the university’s
fee
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fees

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. In conclusion,
while
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studying abroad
provide
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provides

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new experiences and opportunities for
students
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, the stress and cost can be
a considerable drawbacks
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a considerable drawback
considerable drawbacks

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural awareness
  • adaptability
  • academic opportunities
  • specialized programs
  • prestigious courses
  • language proficiency
  • professional network
  • globalized job market
  • personal development
  • independence
  • life skills
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