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The table below shows the water usage for different purposes in six different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the water usage for different purposes in six different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the amount of
water
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 used for 3 different purposes in 6 nations in 2001.
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, agriculture gained the greatest proportion of
water
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 usage. As can be clearly seen
that
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apply
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Australia and Canada achieved the highest
water
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 usage in domestics (341 and 279 m3) . Next came Russia and Turkey, accounting for 98 and 80 m3 respectively. The smallest proportion of
water
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used
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 in Canada and
UK
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the UK
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,
according to
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 26 and 38 m3 in 2001. Regarding
to
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agriculture, there was a huge amount of
water
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 used in Russia and Turkey (1663 and 1462m3).
Canadian
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also
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 used 1338m3 for agricultural activities.
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, 3 other countries used less
water
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, for about 605 to 810m3.
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, 532m3 of
water
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 was used for
industry
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the industry
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 by
Canadian
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Canadians
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,
gained
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 the greatest number
whereas
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 China
as well as
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 Turkey the smallest.
On the other hand
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, Canada and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom’s industrial
water
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 usage was 275 and 398m3
while
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 only 96m3 of
water
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 was used by
Russian
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Russia
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.In
the
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a
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 nutshell,
Canadian
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Canadians
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 used the highest amount of
water
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 in total.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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