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The table below presents the food consumption per person weekly in a European country in 1992,2002 and 2012.

The table below presents the food consumption per person weekly in a European country in 1992,2002 and 2012.
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per individual in a week in Europe between 1992 to 2012.
Overall
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, vegetables
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 the dominant sector throughout the duration which people preferred to eat.
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, Cheese reported the least one which people
interested
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 to
intak
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intake
.
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, all the categories from the beginning started to rise in their contribution and
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 changed
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accordingly
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. In 1992, Vegetables topped the year with 2140
grams
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a person
eat
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 in a week. After, it experienced a slight rise with 2190
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 and continued to increase
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hitting the top of the chart with 2220
grams
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 in 2012.
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, Cheese contributed
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the
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 low amount of food intake per individual in 1992 and
then
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 remained stable in 2002 and 2012.
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, Meat started at 1148
grams
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 in weekly consumption and it grew in
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 direction in 2002 but in 2012, it reduced to 1132
grams
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. To continue, it was followed by Wheat and bean at 837 and 532
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 respectively. Both
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types increased their importance in the following years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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