the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed.

the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed.
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The pie charts provide data on how the police budget was allocated,
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the table illustrates where the income was earned in one area of Britain from 2017 to 2018.
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, most of the money was allocated to the salaries of employees, with the National Government contributing the highest income to the total in both 2017 and 2018. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the National Government ranked
first,
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accounting for approximately 176
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in 2017,
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it had increased slightly to 178
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by 2018. Local taxes and other sources contributed almost 91
m
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and 38
m
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to the total budget respectively,
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the total was 305
m
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at the beginning of the period. Other sources had observed a slight rise, at 38.5,
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Local taxes and the total had risen gradually to 102
m
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and 319
m
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by 2018. Regarding the pie charts, The quantity of money spent on the salaries of officers made up three quarters, with those of buildings and transport forming 17% which was two times higher than the proportion of technology at the beginning of the period. The number of expenditures on salaries went down by 6% and the opposite trend was true for the number of expenditures on technology,
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a remained stable was observed in the amount of money spent on buildings and transport
at the end
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of the period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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