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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have recently been in a sports centre and noticed some issues in the changing rooms. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the centre and say – What was the problem? – Explain why it is bothering you. – Suggest a possible solution.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention towards
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the inconveniency
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inconveniency
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inconvenience
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facing
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faced
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 by the players in the changing
room
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 of the sports
room
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 that
need
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needs
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 to be addressed.
To begin
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 with,
since
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for
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couple
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a couple
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 of
weeks
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weeks,
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 we have been
finding
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having
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 difficulty
in
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apply
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locking the door of the changing
room
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 as the lock is broken partially.
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, it
become
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becomes
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 inconvenient to change the garments in the
room
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 because of privacy concerns.
Additionally
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,
many a times
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many times
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 the lights are not properly functioning in the
room
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 which is another significant
challange
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challenge
. Personally,
a
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I
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 fell down in the changing
room
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last
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 week
due to
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 not getting enough lights to see
the
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apply
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things clearly and injured
my self
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myself
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 badly. Considering all the
challanges
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challenges
, I
recommand
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recommend
 you
to
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call a person who
have
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has
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expertised
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expertise
 in
reparing
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repairing
 and can fix the errors
of
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with
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 door locks and lights as soon as possible to ensure
privacy
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the privacy
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 and
saftey
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safety
 of all the participants. I hope that swift actions
would
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will
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 be taken by your side. Thank you for considering my request. Looking forward
for
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to
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 your response.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Margi Joshi

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Language accuracy
It's beneficial to proofread your letter to correct minor spelling mistakes ('inconveniency' should be 'inconvenience', 'challange' should be 'challenge', 'reparing' should be 'repairing', and 'expertised' should be 'expertise') and grammar errors ('a fell down' should be 'I fell down', 'many a times' should be 'many times') for a clearer message.
Sentence Variety
Consider varying your sentence structures further to enhance the overall readability of your letter. While you’ve made a commendable effort, incorporating a wider range of complex sentence types could enhance your score further.
Development and Support
For an even stronger letter, try to elaborate more on how the issues have impacted the users of the changing room. Offering detailed examples could help to convey the seriousness of the situation and show a deeper level of engagement with the task.
Greeting and Closing
You've addressed the letter appropriately to the manager and signed off correctly, ensuring the letter feels formal and considered.
Logical Structure
Your letter is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing the issues, and a conclusion with a call to action. This organization makes your main points easy to follow.
Single Idea per Paragraph
You’ve effectively used paragraphs to separate your points, making it easier for the reader to distinguish between the different issues raised.
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