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The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.

The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.
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The table illustrates the amount of money used in three different countries in the next five consecutive years and the pie chart presents the proportion of the expected expenditure in
year
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 one.
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it is clear that
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 West Africa and Central
America
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 spend money less than Southeast Asia on projects for sustainable forestry.
Moreover
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, In the first
year
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, cash is mostly spent on salaries.
To begin
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costing
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 in Central
America
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 begins at 10.5 and
then
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 decreases to 2.5 in the third
year
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 before levelling off in the fourth
year
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.
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, it rises to 3.5
in
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 the end of the period. West Africa will spend their cash almost less than Central
America
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 by half.
On the contrary
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, the spending of Southeast Asia
costings
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 for
environment
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the environment
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 seems to be higher than the total amount of money in West Africa and Central
America
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. It will begin at 30 and drop to 20 in
year
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 two,
as well as
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, surging to 50 and hover at
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 point to the end.
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, In
year
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 one of projected expenditure, half of the bill is used for paying salaries. Followed by set-up costs which occupy 30%. Both training and office expenses share the same fraction which is 10%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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