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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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From the
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The
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 given picture,
it
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apply
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 represents the switch in ownership of electrical
appliances
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 and the time spent in
households
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for
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apply
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doing
housework
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 in one country between 1920 and 2019. In 1920, the percentage of electrical
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appliances
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appliance
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usage
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 in
households
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 low.
Firstly
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 the
usage
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 of
refridgerator
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were
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was
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initially
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 zero percentage, but gradually
usage
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 of
refridgerator
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 has been increased.
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Similarly
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Similarly,
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usage
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 of
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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 were
initially
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 30%,but as of
now
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now,
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 2019
Vacuum
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 cleaner
usage
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 is one of the
much needed
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much-needed
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appliances
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.
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Finally
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Finally,
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 the
usage
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 of the Washing machine
uin
Correct your spelling
in
early
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the early
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 days
were
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was
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nearly
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near
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upto
Correct your spelling
up to
 40%,but
in
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apply
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between 1960 to 1980
it's
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its
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usage
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had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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declined and after it increased gradually, but not
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
 the level of
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Correct article usage
the refridgerator
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refridgerator
Correct your spelling
refrigerator
 or
vacuum
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cleaner
Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
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. From the given graph, the picture illustrates the number of
hours
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 of
housework
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 per week per household between 1920 and 2019.During 1920 the
hours
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 of
housework
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 per week per household were 50% and the increase in electrical
appliances
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such
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 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
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refridgerator
Correct your spelling
refrigerator
 and
vacuum
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cleaner
Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
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 made the work quicker and easier.
This
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lead
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led
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 to
reduction
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a reduction
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 in the number of
hours
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 of work in
households
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,almost reduced the work to 10% as of 2019 data.
Finally
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,
Correct article usage
the
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switch
in
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to
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 more electrical
appliances
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 in
hoseholds
Correct your spelling
households
 for doing
housework
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 gradually reduced the number of working
hours
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 in
households
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, initially".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, households, housework, usage, refridgerator, vacuum, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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