The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
From the
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given picture,
it
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apply
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represents the switch in ownership of electrical
appliances
and the time spent in
households
for
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apply
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doing
housework
in one country between 1920 and 2019. In 1920, the percentage of electrical
appliances
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appliance
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usage
in
households
were
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was
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low.
Firstly
the
usage
of
refridgerator
were
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was
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initially
zero percentage, but gradually
usage
of
refridgerator
has been increased.
Similarly
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Similarly,
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usage
of
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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were
initially
30%,but as of
now
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now,
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2019
Vacuum
cleaner
usage
is one of the
much needed
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much-needed
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appliances
.
Finally
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the
usage
of the Washing machine
uin
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in
early
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the early
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days
were
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was
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nearly
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near
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upto
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up to
40%,but
in
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between 1960 to 1980
it's
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its
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usage
had
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apply
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declined and after it increased gradually, but not
upto
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up to
the level of
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the refridgerator
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refridgerator
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refrigerator
or
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. From the given graph, the picture illustrates the number of
hours
of
housework
per week per household between 1920 and 2019.During 1920 the
hours
of
housework
per week per household were 50% and the increase in electrical
appliances
such
as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refridgerator
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refrigerator
and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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made the work quicker and easier.
This
lead
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led
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to
reduction
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a reduction
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in the number of
hours
of work in
households
,almost reduced the work to 10% as of 2019 data.
Finally
,
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the
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switch
in
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to
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more electrical
appliances
in
hoseholds
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households
for doing
housework
have
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has
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gradually reduced the number of working
hours
in
households
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, initially".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, households, housework, usage, refridgerator, vacuum, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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