In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernize, old buildings are demolished and replaces with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old building? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In
this
present world, the necessity of building more residents occurs as population
and the need Correct article usage
the population
of
more Change preposition
for
residence
increase. The need Replace the word
residents
of developing
modern buildings forces the old ones to be demolished and reconstructed Change preposition
to develop
instead
of building it
in empty spaces, Correct pronoun usage
them
due to
having not enough space in myriad cities. It is agreed that pros
of modernising a city outweigh the cons of it. Analysing the advantages of a modern city would prove Correct article usage
the pros
this
statement.
Firstly
, reconstructing a building gives the chance to it to be safer, stronger and far more reliable by using far more developed and successful technologies and strategies while
modenrising
, since the technology improved since the old ones Correct your spelling
modernising
modernizing
built
. Add a missing verb
were built
Moreover
, new techniques and cautions are benefiting the reliability of a building, protecting homeowner
from disasters. Fix the agreement mistake
homeowners
For instance
, staying in a
old building Change the article
an
while
an earthquake is happening would be a nightmare, whereas
new buildings would not even make you feel that a disaster is happening. So, modern buildings are more reliable and stable if you
afraid of disasters.
Add a verb
you are
you were
Secondly
, destroying an old building is extremely time
and money consuming
. Even though, the needed Add a hyphen
money-consuming
money
and time
provided
, permissions to reconstruct are really hard to get. Add a missing verb
are provided
Moreover
, ruins after demolishing
must be cleaned by the same people who Replace the word
demolition
Wrong verb form
demolished
demolish
. Correct pronoun usage
demolish them
For example
, building a house takes 1 year and a budget, whereas
reconstructing it takes one and a half times greater time
and budget. Therefore
the person who modernising the building must think twice before getting in.
To summarize, there are a lot of criteria when choosing to live in whether a
old or Change the article
an
a
modern home, Remove the article
apply
such
as reliability, exterior, sustainability and most importantly the price. Although
the process of building a new apartment is complicated and money
and time consuming
, relying on the home that you live Add a hyphen
time-consuming
Change preposition
in is
is
much more important than Change the verb form
are
money
or time
. After all, it is life and death in that case most people will choose life over death.Submitted by sonatakcaa on
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