Today, more and more people want things instantly (e.g: goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it a positive or negatibe development?

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In today's digital age, there has been a sharp increase in the number of people who want instant news, products and

service

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services

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This

phenomenon is

due to

the advancements in technology and the writer of

this

essay believes that it is a beneficial development for society

due to

the subsequent increased productivity. It should be noted that the increased crave for fast and efficient

service

mainly derives from technological developments. The reason

being

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that the emergence of e-commerce, online news

platform

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platforms

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and the many instances of ready-to-use

service

has brought about an apparent reduction in the

time

spent on these products without decreasing the quality. What is more, it is

also

the

prevalance

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prevalence

of computers that facilitates the experience and makes it more

convienient

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convenient

and easier to use. Take the existing figures on the usage of instant goods

for example

, where a significant increase of nearly 50% can be seen, alongside the decrease in the average

time

spent

for

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these

service

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services

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by 15%. It is the opinion of

this

author that

this

shift in

consumers'

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consumer'

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behaviour benefits

the

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apply

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society in various ways. The most noticeable aspect is the fact

the

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that

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less

time

is spent during

break

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a break

the break

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on food and entertainment.

As a result

, the working hours can be extended, with more tendency to work overtime, leading to an increase in productivity.

For instance

, in

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2017 report, Amazon said that they experienced a voluntary rise in working hours by as much as 3 hours after the implementation of fast

service

in the company. Taking all points into account, the main reason for the

gradually

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shift to instant products is attributable to modern technology.

Furthermore

this

is a positive development for the world because of the improved work productivity

as a result

of reduced

time

consumed for outside activities.

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Lexical Resource

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Task Response

To fully address the question, make sure to explore both positive and negative aspects if the prompt requires a discussion of both sides.

Examples

Effective use of examples to support your main points.

Structure

Good logical structure and cohesion throughout the essay.

Introduction & Conclusion

Clear thesis statement and conclusion that effectively summarize your viewpoint.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

298 words

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Today, more and more people want things instantly (e.g: goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it a positive or negatibe development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views

Government investment in the arts,such as music and theatre is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree.

Many small businesses are being forced to close because they cannot compete with multinational corporations. What problems does this cause, and how can those problems be solved?

Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.