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Band 4.5

Today more and more people want things instantly ( e.g.: goods, services, news ). Why is this? Is is positive or negative development?

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It is a bone of contention that there are increasing groups of people
want
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 to afford numerous types
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 items
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product
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products
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 and
latest
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 notifications
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 higher demand for enhanced lives. I
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completely
 presume that
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 could positively cause an implementation on self-esteem
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 self-reported development.
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, in an extended period of time, the human population are taking steps to improve their certain living conditions in order to achieve
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life
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 and career.
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 has resulted in long-term
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 that facilities and infrastructure are up-to-date and are replacing the dated ones as well.
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, by changing their surrounding environment and
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 adapting to desirable passions of convenience conquest
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 as productivity, services, news and so on, human have
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requirement
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 of immediate entertainment to
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 their attitudes towards
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in
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 a large scale.
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 the immense breakthroughs
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technologies
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technology
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, many households are paying a fortune to fill up their houses with state-of-the-art devices immediately. There can be no doubt that these changes in populations may have
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 superb implementation on every individual across the globe. As far as they take
advantages
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 of instant benefits, they can utilise them to gain more knowledge in order to enhance decision-making capabilities.
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, instant shipping is the paramount service of online shopping in terms of convenience, quickness and
customers
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;
satisfactions
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 and numerous institutions have covered
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billions
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 of dollars and
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 profitable opportunities from
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 method. Substantially, it makes
life
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 faster and more comfortable, which is appropriate for the hustle and bustle of urban cities around the world so far. Taking everything in
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encapsulation
,
i
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 would emphasize that people are more likely to receive things instantly
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 of
higher
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a higher
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 desire for satisfaction
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and
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 joy. Thereby, it could be a positive development regarding both sides because of the
prospertive
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prospective
 factors and other advantages of
life
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.
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Task Response
Ensure to directly address the question prompt and provide a clear opinion or statement in the introduction. This sets a strong foundation for your essay.
Task Response
Develop your main points more fully with specific examples. These examples will help to illustrate your arguments and make them more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Use a variety of linking words to connect ideas within and across paragraphs more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Aim for clarity in your writing. Be cautious with word choice and strive for precision in your expressions to avoid any ambiguity.
Content
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and provides relevant arguments.
Content
The conclusion summarizes the essay’s main points well, reinforcing your stance on the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instant gratification
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer expectations
  • Same-day delivery
  • Streaming platforms
  • Information overload
  • Decision fatigue
  • Environmental implications
  • Societal implications
  • Resource depletion
  • Marketing strategies
  • Consumer satisfaction
  • Quality of life
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