Task 2: Today more and more people want things instantly (eg: goods, services , news ) Why is this? Is it a positive or negative development?
In contemporary society, greater and greater individuals want
things
immediately. This
is because of the fast-paced nature of modern life
leading to the hustle and bustle of society. Additionally
, this
author believe
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believes
this
is a positive development because it enhanced
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enhances
productivity
of Correct article usage
the productivity
life
.
There are several reasons why nowadays humans like everything happen
quickly, but the main factor that Fix the infinitive
to happen
contribute
to Change the verb form
contributes
this
influence is the fast-paced of modern life
. It is true that,
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apply
people
in
these days have to work faster Change preposition
apply
due to
the world is
developing rapidly Unnecessary verb
apply
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
force
them to work harder and faster. Correct subject-verb agreement
forces
For instance
, a builder does not want to waste his time to rest and he want
to Change the verb form
wants
finished
the project as fast as possible so that he can meet the deadline. Change the verb
finish
Thus
, humans nowadays want things
instantly because of the fast-paced nature of modern life
.
This
writer believe
that Change the verb form
believes
this
statement is a positive development. This
is because of the enhanced of
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apply
productivity
when people
is
working faster and make Change the verb form
are
things
more productivity
when people
is
working faster and make Change the verb form
are
things
more productive to meet the demand
of the Fix the agreement mistake
demands
customers
or Change noun form
customer's
customers'
people
lives. It is evident that, when Change noun form
people's
people
want everything happen
quickly, they can contribute to the Add the particle
to happen
productivity
of the company which can related to many aspects such
as:
entertainment, education, Remove the comma
apply
service
,… Correct word choice
and service
Therefore
, when people
need things
instantly, they will make the
society become more productive.
In conclusion, because of the fast-paced Correct article usage
apply
of
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apply
the
modern Correct article usage
apply
life
that leading
to the desire of Wrong verb form
leads
human
to make everything happen quickly. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
Furthermore
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Furthermore,
this
author believe
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believes
this
statement is a positive development due to
it contribute
to Change the verb form
contributes
the
enhanced Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
productivity
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General Writing Skills
Aim to provide a more varied sentence structure and utilize a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
Introduction
Include a clearer, more explicit thesis statement in your introduction to outline the essay's main arguments and direction.
Body Paragraphs
Consider providing more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will help to strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
Grammar and Accuracy
Be cautious of grammatical errors and work on sentence construction for clarity and effectiveness.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on the development of paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by relevant details.
Task Response
You addressed both parts of the question, discussing why people want things instantly and whether it's positive or negative.
Organization
Your essay is structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is good for overall coherence.
Content and Development
You have attempted to support your arguments with examples and explanations, which is essential for a well-rounded essay.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?