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You have got one week break from your office and you want to go on a trip with your uncle as you both like adventurous activities. Write an emaill to your uncle to ask to go on a trip with you. Write an email to your uncle in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things: : What you can do thore Where and when you want to go * Why do you want to go with your uncle only

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Dear uncle, I hope
this
 mail finds you well. I have been thinking about taking
advantages
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 of
break
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a break
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 from
office
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the office
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 and going on
adventure
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an adventure
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, and I could not think
anyone
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of anyone
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 better to accompany me than you. I've been thinking about heading to Banff, Calgary for some outdoor thrills. You know how much I love hiking, and Banff's stunning landscapes offer some of the best trails out there. We can
also
 explore the area's lakes,
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 even try some kayaking or canoeing, touring, fishing and racing if we are feeling adventurous. I specifically want to go with you because you are the perfect companion for these kinds of trips. You have always been up for anything, and your enthusiasm for exploring new places is contagious. Plus, I know we will have a blast together, whether we are conquering a mountain or just enjoying the scenery. What do you say? Are you up for a week of adventure in Banff? Let me know your thoughts, and we can start planning our epic trip! Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards Alma
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Submitted by Alma Islam on

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Coherence & Cohesion
Your email was well structured, effectively introducing the topic, outlining the activities, and expressing your enthusiasm for the trip. To enhance coherence, consider using transitions between ideas for smoother flow.
Task Achievement
You've effectively addressed all three tasks - the activities you want to do, where and when you want to go, and why you want your uncle to accompany you. For even greater impact, consider adding more details about the specific time frame for your trip.
Task Achievement
Your enthusiasm for the trip and the bond with your uncle shines through, making your invitation engaging and personal.
Coherence & Cohesion
You did well to choose a location and propose a variety of activities, showing a good understanding of how to make the trip appealing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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