Developing countries require international organizations' help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Although
it is sometimes thought that growing nations require international organisation's help. some people believe that financial assistance is great
option Add an article
a great
while
others think that active and
suggestions Correct word choice
apply
create
Verb problem
make
a
more sense. In my opinion, Correct article usage
apply
i
consider that developing Change the capitalization
I
countries
need practical aids
and suggestions more rather than financial support.
On the one Fix the agreement mistake
aid
hand
, some people think that practical help and advice can support new countries
more and i
agree Change the capitalization
I
that
. In Change preposition
with that
another words
, one particular new country Replace the adjective
another word
other words
need
Change the verb form
needs
to be
more advice and some Verb problem
apply
hand to
Add a hyphen
hand-to-hand
hand
help to make
some feasible actions to achieve stability more quickly. Correct your spelling
take
As a result
, if they get this
initial assistance at first,
they could manage their economy and able
to make some new strategies for Add a missing verb
be able
next
move. Correct article usage
the next
For example
, some under developed
Correct your spelling
underdeveloped
countries
now make
Verb problem
apply
collaboration
with Replace the word
collaborate
advance
Replace the word
advanced
countries
to increase tourism
industry, so both Correct article usage
the tourism
nation
can take Change to a plural noun
nations
the
advantage Correct article usage
apply
by
Change preposition
of
economically
and publically. Correct pronoun usage
it economically
Furthermore
, Nowadays, many countries
' govenment
minister Correct your spelling
government
does
Unnecessary verb
apply
arange
meetings and increase their relationship and peace Correct your spelling
arrange
between
each other, so they can ask for help in bitter situations.
Change preposition
with
On the other
hand
, it is often believed that finanical
Correct your spelling
financial
aids
would be a good Fix the agreement mistake
aid
dicision
. Correct your spelling
decision
this
is because,
Remove the comma
apply
ecanomic
help can Correct your spelling
economic
be directly solve
their current needs, they can spend Change the verb form
directly solve
this
money on some facilities such
as infrastructure, public health care, education systeme
and transportation modes. Correct your spelling
system
systems
For instance
,
after nuclear
attack on Add an article
a nuclear
the nuclear
japan
in 1945 they lost Capitalize word
Japan
evrything
. if they got economic support Correct your spelling
everything
that
time, they would develop their economy much faster than before. Change preposition
at that
Moreover
, it seems that all nations have some debt on them from
centuries and if any new country Change preposition
for
take
some financial aid, they will need to be many years to repay Change the verb form
takes
this
ammount
or either have to do something Correct your spelling
amount
in
behalf Change preposition
on
on
Change preposition
of
this
favour. thus
, this
would be create
Change the verb form
create
a
another conflict situation for them.
In conclusion, Remove the article
apply
while
people may vary in their opinion, i
think that providing practical help and advice is the better option rather than financial aid because it is hard to get any Change the capitalization
I
finacial
help without any debt and returns.Correct your spelling
financial
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