The given line graph depicts the needs of enquiring that the Tourist Information Office received within six months starting from January 2011 in a city.

The given line graph depicts the needs of enquiring that the Tourist Information Office received within six months starting from  January 2011 in a city.
The given line graph depicts the needs of enquiring that the Tourist Information Office received within six
months
starting from January 2011 in a city. It can be seen that the
number
of
enquiries
in person and by
phoning witness
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phone witnessed
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an increase
while
that of letter or email platforms
undergo
Wrong verb form
underwent
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decline
Correct article usage
a decline
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. People sent their
enquiries
to the Information Office by calling account for the largest
number
in
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at
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the beginning of January with approximately 900
enquiries
, the figure started to slightly drop in the next month and steadily
rise
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rose
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in the next four
months
.
Whereas
, the need to enquire physically rose dramatically within a six-month period and reached the highest
number
of 1900
enquiries
in spite of the lowest starting place with merely 400 in January. Meanwhile, sending
letter
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letters
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or email
enquiries
experienced a fall in six
months
. It can be seen that the
number
of people on
this
platform had a slight decrease In the first three
months
, from nearly 800 to 700
enquiries
. The figure
then
constantly fell and stayed stable at 300 in the
last
two
months
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words months, number, enquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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