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The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main future

The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main future
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The pictures provide information about the transformation of the town
centers
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 in 1990 and 2024.
Overall
. It showed significant changes in the town hall areas,
for instance
, houses, pedestrian cross, and cafe.
In contrast
, several
buildings
 did not change
such
 as
buildings
 in the middle of the town, children's care, and 2 bank
buildings
 in the east. In 1990, the city
centers
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 had stores for shopping and children’s care on the north side.
Hence
, there were several houses on the south side and 2 bank
buildings
 on the east side. The newest conditions of the city are renovated shopping malls, added 2 traffic lights, developed apartments, café and made pedestrians ways. There were several developments
such
 as the building of 2 road crossings, replacing houses with apartment blocks, modifying the car road to a pedestrian area, replacing the bank with a café, and enhancing some shops to be shopping centres.
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