ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart below illustrates the proportions for various age groups of citizens' expenditure in the UK in 2004. Generally, in the table, we can see that interest in spending on
food
and
drink
steadily increased over time. Under 30, people mostly spend their money on restaurants and hotels,
while
, the proportion of spending on
food
and
drink
was a lower percentage than every other group with 7% on the table. Later,
people
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who
are
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31
-
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45, the most valuable thing was
food
and
drink
.
Additionally
, restaurant and hotel spending decreased by 2-3%,
however
, spending on entertainment went up slowly. Persons between 46-60 ages, everything kept their growth except spending on restaurants and hotels. It went down by just 1%.
Moreover
, among
61
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those 61
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-75 ages,
while
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apply
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the spending on
restaurant's
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restaurants
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and
hotel's
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hotels
hotel
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fell down rapidly,
while
, the spending on fun jumped and took the peak point on the schedule.
On the other hand
,
food
and
drink
spending kept climbing.
In addition
, at the age of 76+, spending on amusement surprisingly dropped its majority in the table and reduced speedily. Again, spending on restaurants and hotels started to rise.
Food
and
drink
took the peak point at
this
level by 23%, which was the same interest in entertainment spending to societies who are among 61-75 years old.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drink with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • United Kingdom
  • steady increase
  • marked decrease
  • peak
  • age bracket
  • lower spending
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