Today our communication, medicine and transport systems all depend on computer technology. Our reliance on computer technology in these fields has created a dangerous situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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introduction conclusion present
Introduction and conclusion are present but could be more explicitly linked to the main points of the essay.
logical structure
The logical structure could benefit from clearer paragraphing and a more defined line of argument throughout the essay.
supported main points
Main points are somewhat clear but require further development and relevance to the topic, especially in illustrating the 'dangerous situation' created by reliance on technology.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and contributes to the overall argument of the essay.
relevant specific examples
While some examples are provided, they could be more relevant and directly address the risks associated with relying on computer technology. Additionally, incorporating more balanced views could strengthen the task response.
clear comprehensive ideas
Although main ideas are attempted, they sometimes lack clarity and need more detailed support to ensure they are comprehensive.
introduction conclusion present
The essay could be improved by clearly stating your position on the extent of agreement or disagreement with the statement in the introduction and reiterating this in the conclusion.
complete response
The essay addresses the impact of computer technology on various fields such as security, medicine, and daily life, which is relevant to the task.
supported main points
There is an effort to support main points with examples, such as mentioning hackers and the use of technology in hospitals.
Your opinion
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