The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The line graph illustrates the average shifts in the
price
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ratios of three separate metals which incorporating Copper,
Nickel
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and
Zinc
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in the twelve
months
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of 2014
Overall
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, there was a consistent downward trend observed in metal prices throughout the period. It can
also
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be noted how
Zinc
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experienced a moderate increase. In January 2014,
Nickel
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reached its highest point at 6%, but
then
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quickly dropped to 1% by March.
Following
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this
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, from April to November,
Nickel
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experienced notable
price
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fluctuations before settling at 1%.
On the contrary
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,
Zinc
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saw a rapid increase in its
price
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during the first two
months
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, followed by a 2% decrease in March. Like
Nickel
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,
Zinc
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also
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underwent significant
price
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swings from May to November, with a slight rise to 2% by December. Copper began at 2% in January and fluctuated over the initial seven
months
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, maintaining stability at 1% for the subsequent three
months
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. Towards the end of the year, there was a slight increase to nearly 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, nickel, zinc, months with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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