Deforestation is one of the major issues which need to be tackled. Explore the causes and consequences of deforestation. What strategies, according to you, can be used to promote sustainable forestry and reforestation?

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It is universally acknowledged that forest plays a key role in not only humans’ lives but

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animals’.

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, preserving it is the onus of every individual.

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essay will debate the causes of deforestation and its result

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proposing some practical solutions. The necessity of forests is undeniable and humans’ activities are the first damaging agents. Excessive tree harvesting has originated from supplying demands

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wooden products

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as tables, sofas, and closets.

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, the demand is not the only reason,

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increasing population, forested regions have been transformed into roads and farmlands.

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, deforestation results in soil erosion,

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, whirlwinds, and biodiversity loss.

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, the Amazon Rainforest is exposed excessively cutting down trees and numerous diverse species have lost their habitat and been in danger of extinction. Rainforest undergoes the harsh condition of deforesting and useful solutions should be welcomed by societies and governments. I come up with an afforesting idea to expand the wooden regions.

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entails incentivizing widely civilians

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congress and giving cognition of the necessity of jungles. Teaching the manner of preserving jungles could start from elementary school

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to the youth.

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, the governments should curb

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constructing

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building

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in the green

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limit factories’ activities and take more taxes for destroying vegetation. In conclusion, preserving

vegetations

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is indispensable which requires

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global determination. Deforestation would be accompanied by jeopardizing the health of all

humankinds

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humankind

and species.

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governments and people should

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severe efforts to save it.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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256 words

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Air transport is increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some peoplesay this is good but other believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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