The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of unemployment in two countries, which are Japan and the US, from March 1993 to March 1999.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that the US experienced a downward trend,
while
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Japan saw an upward trend throughout the period.
It is clear that
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the US had 7% of the total at the beginning of the period.
Then
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, it saw a steady increase of 0.1 . After that, it witnessed a slight fall from roughly 7% to 5.5% between 1993 and 1995. they finished by almost 4% in 1999. Generally,there was a fluctuation and decline throughout the time.
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, Japan had started at approximately 2.5% of the rate in 1993.
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, they experienced rapid growth until 1996. After that, it stood at around 3.3% from 1996 to 1998.
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, it skyrocketed from 3.5% to almost 4.3 and finished at 4.3 in 1999.
To sum up
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, there was a steady increase and fluctuation for 7 years.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • graph
  • trend
  • changes
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • findings
  • observations
  • data
  • statistics
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