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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions
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The line graph provides information on how many tourists visited
Caribbean
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Island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total number of
visitors
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 steadily went up over time
while
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 there were some fluctuations in the preference of accommodation chosen by the tourists. During the period from 2010 - 2015,
visitors
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 to
Caribbean
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Island
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 preferred to stay on the
island
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 rather than on cruise ships. The total number of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 was at its peak for 3 years in a row with 1.5
million
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visitors
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 from 2013 to 2015.
However
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, from 2016 onwards, people seemed to change their preference to go on a cruise trip
while
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 visiting the
Caribbean
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 islands with the highest peak at 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017.
On the other hand
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, the total number of
visitors
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 to
Caribbean
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 islands gradually increased from 1
million
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 people in 2010 to 3.5
million
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 people in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words caribbean, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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