The Table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. That starts so the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. That starts so the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and the two pie charts illustrate the numbers of
visitors
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and the results of their satisfaction respectively before and after the
refurbishment
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of the Ashadom
Museum
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.
Overall
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, we can see that the number of
visitors
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during the
year
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after
refurbishment
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was higher than the number before
refurbishment
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.
In addition
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, we can see that most people who visited the
museum
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after
refurbishment
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were “Satisfied” and “very satisfied” rather than the
visitors
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the
year
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before
refurbishment
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who were mainly “Dissatisfied” and
secondly
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“satisfied”. In the table, the number of
visitors
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from 74,000 before the
museum
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was refurbished increased to 92,000 after the
museum
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was refurbished. In the left pie chart which concerns the
year
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before
refurbishment
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, we see that the highest percentage was 40% of dissatisfied people
while
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the lowest percentage was 5% of “No response”. In the right pie chart, which concerns the
year
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after
refurbishment
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, we observe that the highest percentage was 40% of satisfied
visitors
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while
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the lowest was 5% of both very satisfied
visitors
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and those who did not respond.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, refurbishment, museum, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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