The Table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. That starts so the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. That starts so the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and the two pie charts illustrate the numbers of
visitors
and the results of their satisfaction respectively before and after the
refurbishment
of the Ashadom
Museum
.
Overall
, we can see that the number of
visitors
during the
year
after
refurbishment
was higher than the number before
refurbishment
.
In addition
, we can see that most people who visited the
museum
after
refurbishment
were “Satisfied” and “very satisfied” rather than the
visitors
the
year
before
refurbishment
who were mainly “Dissatisfied” and
secondly
“satisfied”. In the table, the number of
visitors
from 74,000 before the
museum
was refurbished increased to 92,000 after the
museum
was refurbished. In the left pie chart which concerns the
year
before
refurbishment
, we see that the highest percentage was 40% of dissatisfied people
while
the lowest percentage was 5% of “No response”. In the right pie chart, which concerns the
year
after
refurbishment
, we observe that the highest percentage was 40% of satisfied
visitors
while
the lowest was 5% of both very satisfied
visitors
and those who did not respond.
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