The diagrams below show how the fish canning is done. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagram shows how
fish
are preserved by canning and bottling, along with
the equipment used.
Overall
, the process has fifteen stages, starting with catching fish
using nets and ending with dispatching the canned fish
to supermarkets.
First,
fish
are caught using nets. After catching, they are frozen to -18°C. The frozen fish
are
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is
then
taken to the harbor
for unloading and weighing. Once thawed, they are prepped for steam cooking.
Change the spelling
harbour
Next,
the steamed fish
are cooled, filleted, and then
filled into cans
. The cans
are sealed and sterilized. Before being stored, the cans
are labeled
with appropriate covers. Change the spelling
labelled
Finally
, the labeled
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labelled
cans
are stored and ready to be dispatched to supermarkets.Submitted by [email protected] on
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