The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The pictures above depict the
process
of creating
cement
, and later the
production
of concrete. One noticeable feature is that
the
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cement
production
is mostly a step-by-step
process
,
whereas
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concrete
production
is mainly a one-step
process
containing
mixture
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a mixture
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of different elements. The picture on the left describes the
process
of making
cement
by
initiating
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mixing limestone with clay
,
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and putting
them
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it
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through a crusher. The produced powder is
then
run through a mixer first and
then
through a rotating heater. After receiving heat, the output is put on a grinder, which eventually produces the
cement
. The
cement
is
then
bagged and shipped off to a construction location to make concrete. The
production
of concrete, as explained in the picture on the right, requires
mixing
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the mixing
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of different
element
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elements
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with different ratios.
Overall
, 15%
cement
is mixed with 10% water, 25% sand, and 50% gravel and
are
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all put in a giant mixer. The mixer
then
rotates clockwise for
sometime
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, after which the concrete is produced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quarrying
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • grinding
  • kiln
  • clinker
  • gypsum
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • building materials
  • limestone
  • clay
  • fine powder
  • rotating
  • cooling
  • hydration
  • aggregate
  • compression
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