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You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and can’t stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: •explain your interest in the course •describe your problems •find out if a refund is possible

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Dear Mr. R, I hope you are in radiant health. My name is Lisa, a student in your 9th batch summer tennis
course
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. I am writing
this
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 email with a
dishearten
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 feeling that unfortunately
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 an
emergency
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 I am not able to finish the
course
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.
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, I know it’s a three-month premium
course
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 and leaving it in a month is quite disappointing.
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, I am always fond of tennis that’s why I came to England to gain the proper training and instruction. With a long face, I have to go back to Canada, where my parents need me most.
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, I am
the
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 only child, and my father is undergoing
a
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major surgery.
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, he wanted to see me before going to
operation
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the operation
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theater
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.
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, my mother’s condition is getting bad, as she is handling all the
medial
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medical
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 formalities by herself.
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, it’s
a
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high time to stay with them and already booked the return ticket.
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, I paid the
course
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 fee in advance during registration. It would be highly appreciated if you
can
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 refund half of my payment. I am looking forward to hearing from you and anticipating a positive response. Yours sincerely, Lisa

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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear and distinct main idea. Avoid combining multiple different points within the same paragraph.
logical structure
Improve the logical flow of your letter by using more transitional phrases between different sections and points.
suitable writing tone
The letter follows a polite and suitable writing tone, which is appropriate for a formal letter.
greeting and closing
Good use of greeting and closing phrases, such as 'I hope you are in radiant health' and 'Yours sincerely,' which adds a personal touch to your letter.

Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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