The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts 

show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The
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table
shows the
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proportion
of people who had visited at Ashdown Museum between a year before and later. The data gives information about five types of visitor satisfaction.
Overall
, the percentages of satisfaction by the population who
was visited
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results from
year
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before
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the referbishement
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referbishement
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refurbishment
dissatisfield
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dissatisfied
was highest and no response was
lowset
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lowest
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, after
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refurbishment
satisfiled
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satisfied
is largest. Standing in the same position as before
anafter
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and after
is
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no responses same as
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dissatisfiled
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dissatisfied
. From the beginning people who
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not
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40
percent
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10
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and 10
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percent
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higher than satisfied. Very
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satisfied
is 15
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of
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who
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visited and satisfied is 10
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of tourism, in between that have 5
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of mankind who are still no responses and
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do
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not
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any ideas about their feeling why they are here for.
Secondly
, a year after
referbishment
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refurbishment
. As
shows
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shown
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in the data.
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are more satisfaction 10
percent
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increased and very satisfied is extremely rose 20
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of people who
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attended. 25
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of
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dissatisfied
decreased,
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no responses and very dissatisfied are standing in the spot of the result.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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