The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

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table

shows the

poportion

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proportion

of people who had visited at Ashdown Museum between a year before and later. The data gives information about five types of visitor satisfaction.

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, the percentages of satisfaction by the population who

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results from

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before

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refurbishment

dissatisfield

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was highest and no response was

lowset

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lowest

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, after

referbishment

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refurbishment

satisfiled

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satisfied

is largest. Standing in the same position as before

anafter

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no responses same as

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dissatisfiled

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dissatisfied

. From the beginning people who

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not

dissatsified

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dissatisfied

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are

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percent

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and 10

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higher than satisfied. Very

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satisfied

is 15

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percent

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citizen

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who

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visited and satisfied is 10

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percent

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of tourism, in between that have 5

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of mankind who are still no responses and

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not

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any ideas about their feeling why they are here for.

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, a year after

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refurbishment

. As

shows

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in the data.

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are more satisfaction 10

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percent

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increased and very satisfied is extremely rose 20

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of people who

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attended. 25

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dissatified

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dissatisfied

decreased,

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no responses and very dissatisfied are standing in the spot of the result.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

182 words

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