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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004. Write at least 150 words.
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The given table provides information on: daily oil production in different countries ( Nigeria, Chad, Congo, Somalia ) . It is obvious that there are
same
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some
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 significant changes in the given figures .
Overall
, there was
upward
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an upward
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 trend in Congo except
the
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 year 2004
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While
,
there
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whereas there
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 was a downward trend in Chad .
According to
 the table, Chad had the
lowast
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lowest
 proportion in the first three years reaching 0 Which they had
a
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inceased
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increased
 numbers
at
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 8,000 in 2003 and 50,000 in 2004 respectively .
Similarly
, the second lowest
percentages
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 was in Somalia but, there was a
sharply
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 increase in the
last
 period .
Than
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, Congo started with 275,000 barrels . Afterwards, they declined until reaching 203,000 in 2004.
By contrast
, Nigeria had a dramatic rise in whole years except in 2002
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While
, was a decreased proportion at 190,000 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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