The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.

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The given table provides information on: daily oil production in different countries ( Nigeria, Chad, Congo, Somalia ) . It is obvious that there are

same

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significant changes in the given figures .

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, there was

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trend in Congo except

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year 2004

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there

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was a downward trend in Chad .

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the table, Chad had the

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lowest

proportion in the first three years reaching 0 Which they had

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inceased

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8,000 in 2003 and 50,000 in 2004 respectively .

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, the second lowest

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was in Somalia but, there was a

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increase in the

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period .

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, Congo started with 275,000 barrels . Afterwards, they declined until reaching 203,000 in 2004.

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, Nigeria had a dramatic rise in whole years except in 2002

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, was a decreased proportion at 190,000 .

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