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You currently live in a rental apartment, and the noise from your neighbours disturbs you. Write a letter to your landlord.

#apartment #noise #neighbours #landlord
Dear Sir, I am writing a letter to inform you that neighbours in the next door are really chaotic.I would like you to shift me
in
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 another building. Let me explain the situation in detail. I am a college student who
have
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 just shifted from a village to
study
 in the city. As I told you that I am a student here, So, I have subjects to
study
 at night and it is a part of my daily routine, I cannot skip
it
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 but the
next door
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 neighbours play music very loudly and it affects my
study
. I get disturbed and I cannot concentrate. I have to
study
 at night and the next morning, I have to wake up early for college. My routine is getting disturbed because of neighbours. I would request you to talk with them or shift me
in
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 another building
of
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 the same area because it is affecting my
carrer
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career
. It would be great if you look into
this
 matter as soon as possible. I hope you will understand the issue. Thank you very much. Yours Sincerely, Kulbeer
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph clearly focuses on one main idea and by using more transitional phrases to guide the reader through your points.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the single-idea-per-paragraph strategy by breaking down your explanation into smaller, distinct sections.
task achievement
Expand on the details provided to make your request more persuasive and comprehensive. For instance, you can mention any efforts you've already made to solve the problem and their outcomes.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, fitting for the context of writing a letter to a landlord.
task achievement
The letter addresses the main problem (noisy neighbours) and clearly states the desired outcomes (moving to another building or having the landlord talk to the neighbours).
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, appropriate for formal communication with a landlord.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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