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Band 2.5

fast food has become cheaper in recent years. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

#food #years
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It is argued that the availability of junk foods at
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a cheep
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cheap
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cheep
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 rate has become common in the
last
 few years.
Although
 it will reduce the expense of
food
 lovers but
also
 affects
the
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 health.
This
 essay will explain the
adavantages
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advantages
 and disadvantages of
low cost
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 fast foods.
Primarly
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Primarily
, health is the most
valubale
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valuable
 asset for
humanbeing
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human being
human beings
, people need to spend more money in hospitals
now adays
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 because of the
low quality
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 products which
used
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 to make meals to reduce the rate of
food
.
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, children who
loved
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 to eat Noodles which
is
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most
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the most
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 common in the market with Rs.10 but the contents like
ajeno
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 motto
is
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are
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 added to increase the taste but the cost for the production is
very
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 less.
In addition
 to that, humans can reduce the
mothly
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monthly
 expense
for
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 having
such
kind
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kinds
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 of items. It will
helps
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 to add more money into their savings. They can use the additional savings to increase their wealth.
For example
, professionals who are living in other places for
job
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jobs
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 usually prefer to eat
food
 from
food
 trucks to reduce their monthly
expense
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expenses
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. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, the advantage of better health
condition
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conditions
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 outweighs the savings from
low quality
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low-quality
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 items.
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task response
The essay addresses the topic and provides an introduction and conclusion, but the arguments need further development to be comprehensive. Providing more balanced arguments and detailed examples could improve the quality of the response.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with language accuracy. Words like 'cheap' and 'nowadays' were misspelled 'cheep' and 'now adays'. Make sure to proofread your essay to avoid such mistakes.
coherence cohesion
While the essay introduces the main points well, it needs more structure and flow between ideas. Use linking words and phrases to ensure better coherence and cohesion.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which frames the discussion well.
task response
The essay attempts to address both advantages and disadvantages, which is a positive approach to the task.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordability
  • accessible
  • low-income families
  • convenience
  • busy lifestyles
  • demanding jobs
  • variety of options
  • cater to different tastes
  • poor nutrition
  • health problems
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • high availability
  • low cost
  • overconsumption
  • unhealthy eating habits
  • environmental impact
  • packaging waste
  • carbon footprint
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