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The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.
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town
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a town
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 which is in
an
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American
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America
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 developed over a period
60
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of 60
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 years.
Overall
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, what stands
from
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out
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is the
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the
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that
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 there have been big changes
,
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 like commercial buildings
have
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added in the town from 1948 to 2010. Looking
to
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at
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a
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the
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 details, there were factories and
the
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a
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 petrol station in the north of the city. The residential houses were located in the southern and northern areas, with a canal between them from the west to the east. The local supermarket and factories were surrounded by a road. In the south of the canal,
church
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 was situated. With regard to
current
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 layout, the factories
have
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 demolished to make way for
airport
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the airport
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 in 2010. The number of residential houses
have
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 decreased
for
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because of
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opening
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the opening
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 of commercial buildings whose these have located in three
area
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 of the town. The church has
replace
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replaced
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 by
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a sorts
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sorts
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sports
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stadium
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of stadium
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, and the supermarket has
carried
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been carried
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 to the north side of the city,
whereas
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 the petrol station has remained untouched
in
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along the road.
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