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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is traffic on roads. Traffic on roads has become a problem in the world. It is undeniable that cars has become an essential part of our life

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
traffic
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 on roads.
Traffic
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 on roads has become a
problem
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 in the world. It is undeniable that cars
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 become an essential part of our life.
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, these days we have problems with
traffic
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 and the amount of cars in the world. One of the main aspects of the
problem
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 is that
traffic
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 pollutes the environment. Today we can see that in some countries there is polluted air. One of the main reasons behind
that is
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 that
traffic
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 produces a lot of harmful chemicals.
This
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 could lead to global warming or might result in acid
rains
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. To tackle
this
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problem
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 people should add some new laws as in Asian countries.
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, we can see that in China, the government regulates
traffic
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 through a law that allows you to drive on certain days of the week. We can
also
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 see
this
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 law in Mongolia
an
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and
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 other Asian countries, where
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 law
nealy
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nearly
 adopted.
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 may be the easiest and so the best way to reduce the
ammount
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amount
 of
traffic
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. Having weighed everything mentioned
up
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, we can come to
a
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the
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 conclusion that the government and society can reduce the
problem
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 with the amount of
traffic
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 at a
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 level and at an individual level but it
take
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 a lot of effort. So it would not be surprising to see some little changes in the near future. Actions must be taken urgently,
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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 we will get problems
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with
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wit
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with
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 global warming, polluted air, acid rains
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Ensure subject-verb agreement throughout the essay. For example, "cars has become" should be "cars have become."
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Include more specific examples and evidence to support the points. Mentioning specific countries is good, but providing more details would strengthen the essay.
coherence cohesion
Provide well-developed paragraphs with clear and explicit topic sentences. This helps in structuring your essay more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases (like 'furthermore', 'however', or 'as a result') to link your ideas better and help the flow of the essay.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the discussion well.
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The main points are relevant and address the topic effectively.
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The essay discusses both problems and potential solutions which makes it a balanced response.
coherence cohesion
There are no serious communication problems; the essay is easily understandable.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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