Today more and more people want things instantly? Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

Nowadays more and more population want things instantly in many mature like goods, services,
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want anything instantly. If anything instantly will have some problem that
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, if they want to go home hurry and next to
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positive for education or some of
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to be a team player.
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because that skill will help a lot for
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things instantly is not bad but must choose
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thing to want because with
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you choose will design
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cohesion
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This will make your points clearer and more persuasive.
coherence
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The essay attempts to discuss both positive and negative aspects, which is good for a balanced argument.
coherence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • rapid advancement
  • instant communication
  • online shopping
  • fast food delivery
  • social media platforms
  • immediate feedback
  • recognition and validation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • convenience
  • decreased patience
  • delayed gratification
  • realistic expectations
  • work ethic
  • unrealistic expectations
  • stress
  • dissatisfaction
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