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More and more people are going to study at universities in their own country or abroad. what are the advantages and disadvantages of studying at a university in your own country?

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More and more people are going to study at universities in their own
country
 or abroad. In
this
essay
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 I will talk about
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of studying at
university
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a university
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 in your
country
. In the begin with, getting a university education in your own
country
have
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 many advantages, the first positive thing is that you will stay with your family and friends so you will not feel lonely,
also
 you will not have to cook, clean, take care of your housing so you will have enough
time
 to focus on studying and you will save a lot of
time
 comparison with those studying abroad , in
same
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time
 you can get help with anything related to studying from your close people,
for
example
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 you can do your homework with your brother help or one of your friends.
However
, there are some disadvantages to studying in your
country
, you won't learn how to rely on yourself and
this
 is the best thing you should learn at
this
 stage of life, an example of
this
if
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 you study abroad you will know how to organize your
time
.
Also
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 it will be difficult for you to focus in full on your studies
while
 you are with your family and friends. But in my opinion,
begin
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 with your family
during
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 studying much better than
studing
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studying
 abroad and the advantages more than the disadvantages,
this
 will make studying easier for you, you will not feel tired because of
take
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 care of
housing
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your housing
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,
therefore
 you will get
a
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apply
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good marks in university.
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