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The bar chart shows the percentage of small, medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.

The bar chart shows the percentage of small, medium, large companies which used social media for business purposes between 2012 to 2016.
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The bar chart provides
a
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clear data,
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on
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how social
media
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such
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 as
Youtube
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YouTube
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,
facebook
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Facebook
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, Instagram
and
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etc, was used by various small, medium and large organizations to develop their
business
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 between
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years
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the years
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 2012 to 2016. We can see that, Out of
three
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the three
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catergories
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categories
, only the big-corporate companies utilized more social
media
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upto
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up to
79%
in
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between the
years
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 2012 to 2016
promote
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 their market between the
years
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 2012 except in the year 2015 with 52%.
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, Medium entities promoted
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about
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their company services or products and developed their
business
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 from 0% to 52% in 2013,2014 and 2016. But, in the
years
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 2012 to
2015
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2015,
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 medium organizations usage
was
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declined to 30%. Likely, through the help of social
media
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 platforms, Small
business
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 groups developed in the range
25
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of 25
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% to 35% in the year 2012 to 2015, Fortunately, in the year 2016 the percentage nearly reached
to
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50.
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,
due to
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 the usage of technology and social
media
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 companies are growing in their
business
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 fields. .
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words media, business, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital landscape
  • Market competition
  • Customer engagement strategies
  • Adoption rate
  • Comparative growth
  • Fluctuations
  • Entities
  • Proportions
  • Embracing
  • Predicts
  • Trends
  • Uptake rates
  • Substantial
  • Decline
  • Interpretations
  • Engagement
  • Noticeable
  • Implications
  • Consistently
  • Summarizing
  • Reflecting
  • Implications
  • Predicting
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