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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provided illustrates the average income of United Kingdom
citizents
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citizens
 in different
cities
 (London, Manchester, Glasgow, Bristol, Birmingham, Edinburgh and Cambridge).
Unit
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 of
measuerment
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measurement
 used is pound sterling.
Overall
, it can be seen that the population in London city was the highest among all other
cities
 and indeed their salaries
was
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 very high £33,634.
While
,
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 the number of people living in Cambridge
were
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 relatively low compared to other
cities
 their income was the second highest among all other
cities
 which was £29,854. In terms of Manchester and Glasgow salaries, were almost near to each other with a slight difference of around 250 pounds (£25,909 and £26,150 respectively).
Moreover
, Bristol and Edinburgh salaries
was
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nearll
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nearly
 the same with a
diffrence
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difference
around
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of around
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 200 pounds only. Regarding the other
cities
, London
was
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the
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has the
higest
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highest
 income compared to Birmingham (£33,634 and £25,531 respectively).
Birstol
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Bristol
 has a population of 3113
person
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people
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, which get paid £27,828.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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